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gaps

blue_bikethey all have
smart
phones and intense

powers of
deep
concentration;

worlds in their
palms,
friends on their mind

he rides a
plain
blue bicycle

picks up good
lengths
of string and wire

in case they
may
become useful


Image from seeker-of-revelation at deviantart
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  1. I know that bicycle rider. He has everything the others have except the smartphone.

  2. I think I have seen him too, sometimes driving a car, talking and talking. The photo adds a sinister feel to the poem, which is otherwise vivid and partial, as if what you didn’t say in the next stanza would have been the crash due to his distraction. I very much like the way it ends. Why did you switch from plural to singular? For whatever reason, it is effective, it focuses. Good job.

  3. It occurs to me, in leaving, that I have not taken your title into account. I will be coming back to read it again anyway.

  4. This is an unusual and interesting poem. “Worlds in their palms” is a brilliant metaphor which carries your message wonderfully. Thanks for sharing! 🙂

  5. I keep coming back to this. Now I think perhaps the bicycle is the contrast between some vestige of the past and the new bicycles or strings of the future. This is really very good. It draws one in.

  6. Thanks everyone for the comments & discussion. I don’t feel like enlightening anyone (yet 😉 ), suffice to say that meaning has been found that I haven’t even considered!

  7. Happy Thanksgiving to you. I know you Australians probably don’t have a holiday today, and you are going in to spring anyway, but you’ll have a day and I hope it is a good one and that you are filled with gratitude for every good thing. God bless you.

  8. picks up good
    lengths
    of string and wire

    in case they
    may
    become useful

    Because life is really just a cycle, this is bound to happen sometime in the future so it’s best to be ready. Great poem that works as a reminder, too. 🙂

  9. planaquarium on said:

    Love this contrast and metaphor – the sensible cyclist who sees modern technology for what it is, a cold impersonalization of communication, leaving ‘gaps’ in human relationships. He is wise who still values conversation without the aid of a device.

  10. OK, the idea I get is the contrast, the gap between new and old, personified by technology – smart phones vs bits of wire and string, bicycles. It is very tightly drawn and very effective.

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